Wow, that was deliciously creepy and awful! I really didn't see that particularly gruesome ending coming, either. I haven't read any of Stacia Kane's stuff before, but now I feel like I've been missing out.
A new story entry has been added:
What's Below--Fiction by Stacia Kane
Wow, that was deliciously creepy and awful! I really didn't see that particularly gruesome ending coming, either. I haven't read any of Stacia Kane's stuff before, but now I feel like I've been missing out.
Hmm. The style was a bit clumsy and self-conscious, and drew me out of the story, but it's damn hard to tell a story like that and have it sound natural. I hope Stacia keeps at it.
I'm still swimming in harmony. I'm still dreaming of flight. I'm still lost in the waves night after night...
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Still have shivers down my spine from that! Would love to read more by Stacia.
Whee! I liked it! I'd like to see it expanded more fully though. Short stories are nice because there's no time commitment but this one seems like it would be a good bedtime read.
I guess it doesn't really matter, but the front page link for this article says there are five comments instead of 9.
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I might ask her to submit again in the future, but she's a busy lady!I loved it! I actually enjoy short stories more than novels because I have no patience. Will we get to read more by Stacia Kane?
FWIW, Stacia wrote on her blog that this is a complete departure from her usual work. She never writes short stories or in the 1st POV. Given those facts, I thought it was quite effectively done.
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I thought the writing was excellent. The narrator had a great voice that carried through the piece. The story itself left me with shivers. This was definitely enough to make me want to check out Stacia's other work.
No problem. We all give in to anger sometimes; it's rarely useful to one's argument, though.
If you mean the entire Mellophant board, then you're not familiar with my posting. If you mean the threads related to Front Page content, I'd have to say it doesn't matter whether a critique is positive or negative, as long as it's honest and to the point. I don't owe another writer praise, just a careful reading and a fair evaluation. I've gotten a lot of rejections, and the ones that included some specifics about why my story was inadequate have been helpful, even if they stung a bit.Originally posted by 5er
It is awfully nice for a full-time pro to give the Elephant a story as a favor. I've re-read "What's Below", and I think it would really take somebody like Ramsey Campbell or Harlan Ellison to make that story interesting to me. I'm just not the intended audience, so my critique is probably irrelevant.
This story was definitely worth waiting for. (I had to have help to see it)
I didn't expect the ending and it was as spooky as hell to me. I'm looking forward to more Stacia Kane!
They weren't singing....they were just honking.
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