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  1. Afraid of the Dark

    5 Comments by pepperlandgirl Published on 28 Oct 2009 02:21 PM
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    Afraid of the Dark


    Emily stared in the darkness, ears straining to pick out the sound that must have woke her. Behind her, Tony rolled to his side and draped his arm over her waist and pulled her closer. She didn

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    Oliphaunt Baldwin's avatar
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    Interesting. The last line is the best part of the piece; that actually brought up thoughts that gave me goosebumps. Really important to have a strong finish, in a story like this.

    Hey, and who did that illustration? Nice!

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    Thanks. I don't know who did the illustration. I just did a search for "demons" and tried to find an image that didn't look hokey!
    I'm still swimming in harmony. I'm still dreaming of flight. I'm still lost in the waves night after night...

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    I've had better days, but I don't care! hatesfreedom's avatar
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    Not a bad story. The historian in me wants

    I think you should be telling me what the fuck is going on, Tony snapped, his anger a common response to her demands.

    to be changed to:

    "I think you should be telling me what the fuck is going on, Tony snapped


    Cause I'll never care if it's the common expected response, who gives a shit. It's a response. Me shooting Myrnalene in the head for being a zombie might be the common ordinary response but what I just did is I actually just shot her in the head. Ok. I'm oft. You're all gay and play bingo.

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    Well, hates, when you're right, you're right. I agree that that line should have been edited out (or not written in the first place).
    I'm still swimming in harmony. I'm still dreaming of flight. I'm still lost in the waves night after night...

    Do you have an idea or an article you would like to see on the Electric Elephant? Email me at theelectricelephant(at)gmail.com!

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    like Gandalf in a way Nrblex's avatar
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    Ugh. Criminy, you people need to stop posting scary shit and forcing me to read it in the middle of the night.

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